Well, on my crappy monitor at work, it's nothing but a big black rectangle! Don't worry though Dan, I'll check it out when I get home on my spankin' new LCD.
it does look nice...but it's too dark on my screen. i like dark photos though, and hate it when people say something is "too dark"...because often times if it were any lighter it would ruin the mood. so, maybe instead of getting a lighter shot, you could work with the cropping here to lessen the amount of negative space that is so overbearing on the contrast and shadow-subjects.