The face expression of that woman had something completely detached from everything as she seemed to walk without noticing anything around. I gave it a try through the window of the tram which added the typical "dirt filter look". It matches the looks of the scene itself, I think. Just a street and everyday life, plus a person seems to be somewhere else. I'd be glad for any comments.
Then it seems that I have more than enough data for trying it again with a better balance between too much and too little space, Joggie. Thanks a lot for the input - now I just habe to wait for yet another absent person.
Hi Nick, I agree - you cannot remove more space in front without loosing the atmosphere and sense of her absence. I like the tighter crop, preventing the eye to wonder way down the street to the right. The apparent conversation between the males behind her comes through stronger now, further emphasizing her absent gaze. Regards. Joggie
Thanks a lot for the in depth going comment and the suggestions, Joggie! They sound very promising, so lemme follow them.
I tightened the crop and increased the size a bit, which of course lowered the available sharpness, but allows some general view of your proposed crop. I also sharpened a bit her face for keeping some better view of her detached expression. After that I converted it to B&W.
I think you are absolutely right. Her mental absence is more dominant now. Some bit of that distance you referred to should be still kept, I think, for placing her in that "empty space" which for me fits her detached expression. But how much epmty space - that's the question. It was too much on the original image, but is it OK now? Or should it be more/less?
Thanks a bunch again for the very nice and detailed comment!
Hi Nick - not the easiest of photos to pull off. Personally I would like a tighter crop wit more emphasis on the ladies' face and that detached expression - I really think thats where the heart of the shot is. The large empty space in front of her kind of place the viewer outside of the scene, bringing a distance. I also think B&W will suit the image better, especially bringing out the 'detached' atmosphere. Kind regards. Joggie
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