Good management of light and alluring pose. I like the makeup and eye treatment. A little more attention on the hair prep might have yielded a minor improvement. --Jan
You know, quite honestly, if you're going to crop tight across the top of the head, my preference would be to pull in the left side crop as well. That would eliminate the blank white area and (I think) make for a more dynamic composition! (I've attached an example for your consideration. Good color and clarity though! Lovely model.
I'm proud of you Chris . . . you kept the focal point on the eyes! :P